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Jeremy's Reviews for "Monster Mishaps"
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Jeremy has left 14 reviews this fight, have you added yours yet?
Jeremy has left 14 reviews this fight, have you added yours yet?
OMG! FUC KING HILARIOUS!!! This is very similar to an idea I thought of not long ago. My only criticism is that the vampire makeup was not good and that it ended very abruptly. I heard you had to cut your credits out, so that may be part of the harsh end cut. Other than that, I loved it. Perfect short gag idea for this mini fight.
HA, VAIDS. Nice. Very good joke for the time limit. Mike's acting was great. Only criticisms would be the audio difference between shots seemed very harsh. I would have liked some light fake hospital noises in the room or less in the lobby. I realize the room would be less noisy, but not so much less. The lighting in the room was a little spotlight-ish. Aside from those couple things, technically very awesome and definitely very funny.
Mmm, I liked the noisy lobby area. I think that an actual hospital room would be pretty quiet, from what I've experienced. I think one thing I could have done maybe to fix is -- is to have it louder and then add a 'door closing' sound and after that the ambient would go away. I didn't want to distract from the dialogue either.
You probably just go to nicer hospitals. HAHA. You may be right, the only thing that threw me off was the harsh difference.
That was pretty hilarious. Mike's acting when he got the bad news was pretty spot on, and of course 'VAIDS' is pretty funny in and of it's self. And the twist at the end! Oh, that delightful vampire bastard.
Audio and lighting were decent. Lighting of the gay vampire could have been softened a bit. Some of the audio cuts some too harsh. Acting by interviewer was really good. The end joke could have been better. Focused more on how flamboyant he was rather than his sexual preference.
yea i agree about the end, we originally had him attacking his prey in a very flamboyant/funny way, but damn 30 seconds turned out to be quick.
Yeha, keeping it under 30 without and still giving it substance turned out to be the biggest challenge for most of the groups, I think. Good excersize. I wish I would have filmed my "real" entry. I think I would have learned from it.
This was the perfect example of a really great idea with funny moments and decent acting that was slightly spoiled by some easily fixed, but highly distracting technical issues. I am guessing that whoever edited this is kind of new to editing or the program they were using and will improve after cutting a few movies. I will give some specific examples. The restaurant is so noisy it hits you right in the face as soon as the soothing music from the opening graphics end. Starting the restaurant audio from the beginning might have been a preferable way to approach it. that's more preference, than anything, though. Again, cutting to the outside scene, we have a very harsh audio cut that could have been softened with a transition. I think I will start a thread about audio transitions in the forums to better illustrate what I am talking about. And again when he is back in the restaurant or whenever he is now when the guy is talking on the cell phone. The worst comes when the tp gets stuck in the door. Not only does the background noise go from loud, to quite, to loud (am am guessing lots of traffic), there is also someone's voice who gets cut off abruptly. The cut to the door was a little long, as well. And one more time when you cut to the exposed mummy tummy. If you aren't sure what audio transition are, or more likely not sure how to do them, I am planning on starting a thread in the forums where people can share their ideas and strategies for dealing with them. Hope you didn't mind me picking it apart a little. It was a really funny movie that was deserving of my time. I really think you could have some great entries if you just step your game up bit.
my audio is indeed horrendous, i recognize its an area where i need improvement. I really look forward to a thread about audio transitions and cleanups. Im gald you reviewed, thanks.
Well, I think this was a pretty decent idea. My main beef was the VO and the guy talking. The voice in the VO sounded just like the guy that usually talked over the blue screen with the price and shipping at the end of an "As Seen On TV" style commercial. You don't really ever see that guy, though. I would have liked it better if you either just captured the live audio of this covered guy, or just cut him out all together and had other things during that part. I have no suggestions as to what those other things might have been. I also don't understand why his head is covered. Is that an ACORN reference that I don't get? I am admittedly don't know much about ACORN. The white balance and lighting seemed to be a little off on this part, too. The vampire at the end was hard to see, but I am guessing that could have been partially from the conversion when uploading. I know the compression really did a number on my last submission. I could still see him, so that is forgivable. I liked the cheesy CASHEW graphic and I thought the acronym was pretty clever. Definitely fit the criteria and was a topical parody of current events. I have noticed a trend in your movies of you using VOs. Do you just have a really bad camera mic and don't want to use the audio from your takes? Sorry if my review seems harsh. Then again, I guess it's better than just saying I didn't like it without offering any reasons why and moving on.
The onboard camera mic was used for the vampire interview part and as you can hear, it's not that great. The reason the minion at the beginning was covered was because I played him as well.
HEY, where'd you get that cool intro? Wait that's it? I was typing and missed what happened. Oh, ok. Well, short and sweet. Some better lighting in the hallways would have been nice, since that's where we were most of the time. Cute little idea for the minifight, just not, ya know, HW material. But, hey, we are competing against each other, again two weeks in a row! How long's it been since that happened?
She was tricky and just key'ed out the purple background to modify the intro. I love when people do that stuff!
My film, so obviously perfect. HA. J/k, not even close. For starters, my focus is off on most of the scenes. I don't usually make this mistake when I am behind the camera, but that's not really an excuse, since I still set up all the shots. I think that beginning shot could have been broken up with another shot. Maybe something different and longer when she mentioned "messed up by your kids" The close ups of Heather looked blown out. That is because the back lighting was too bright and I had to jack up the gamma to light her face. Believe me, it looks better than it did. I don' think the cut to Kyle's "portrait" pumpkin was held long enough to really get across the point that it was just some shitty generic pumpkin face that looked nothing like him. I considered putting more titles on this, but wound up being lazy with that part. This movie was primarily training for me. Heather was nice enough to come down and teach me some of the basics with Final Cut Pro on her giant new iMac. I figured shooting something simple for this fight would be perfect for that. I blew the time limit on purpose. I could have maybe trimmed it to fit, but even then, the while premise didn't come across as funny as it did in my brain. I think it turned out to be a mildly fun little LW, though.
Oh yeah, forgot to mention the refrigerator noise. Louder from one scene to the next. Could have been fixed by adding some into the quieter part. Again, was being lazy.
What the heck is with this aspect ratio? Haha. K, wont hold that against you in the LW category you are allowed some mistakes. This could have been paced better if you mixed up a few shots from different angles. Remember to set your white balance. Most cameras have that option. Good mummy costume. Could have used some slurpping or something with the milk and coffee. Was this a voice over? Nice, quick little idea. Just maybe a little too simple to make the HWs. Still a fun watch. Thanks for entering.
OK, I am not going to lie, I LOLed at the blackface. I can see where you have some compression problems. That could be with all the trouble you had. Alasdair. WHITE BALANCE. You had some refrigerator noise going on in your kitchen scene, too. Softened those cuts up. "is it my hair??" haha. I did like your hair in that, btw. That girl is a pretty good actor. I think you might have been able to make HW with this one if you cleaned up your editing on it. And set your WHITEBALANCE. Good laugh, though, for sure.
I really enjoyed this. That sentence may discourage any future employers, but seriously, technical issues aside, that was brilliant.
And that young lady was pretty darn attractive.
Also, i am pretty sure i am posting these reviews incorrectly. Sorry about that.
You need to leave the reviews from the front page - this page is only for leaving replies at the moment!
I love seeing really young groups enter. That automatically makes it a smidge more fun. Before I even review, let me make a request. PLEASE keep submitting over and over, at least until you make a few HWs. You guys are obviously new to the game, so you can expect a few LW entries at the beginning. OK, what could you do better? The music was too loud, couldn't hear your people. A few of your actors also were too quiet. Nice try on the gun shot effect, but the graphic was kind of "squared off" on the edges. Liked the gunshot sound. I'd start with that stuff for now and then learn audio blending and all that stuff. Even though 30sec is easy to shoot, it's hard to make the story good. I can't wait to see what you shoot for something longer. BTW, remember when you shoot inside, add more lighting (even if its just ringing in lamps from another room), set your white balance, and shut off any noisy appliances, fishtanks, ect. You'd be surprised what noises you don't notice until you're editing. Cheers!
Pretty decent little idea for the mini-fight. Like I said with a couple of the others, it was almost a little too simple to really make it to the HWs. That was, of course, the main challenge of this fight. Technically it seemed pretty good. The establishing moon shot was helpfully for setting up that they were outside. I liked how their faces were lit, but seeing some background might have been nice. Cool werewolf costume. Would have preferred the shot to have been less of him looking up, and more of him looking at the camera, so we could see his face. What was with his long nose? haha. That was weird, but funny. Not really a lot of advice to offer. I want to see what you bring to the table with a longer fight.
btw, great job on being the ONLY group with the correct title!
i loved the "girls" dialogue/acting, especially the "kiss me." Good idea, i think it just needed a good last shot/ending to take it to the next level.
thanks so much!
I really appreciate the feedback!
See you at the next fight!
thanks jeremy!
This is our first time submitting to filmfights and everyone has been so helpful and friendly! I really like this site!
Thanks again!
Ha. Fun little idea. This is one place I thought the VO added to the hilarity of it. The mumbling and all that was good. Screen shots were a little dark. Don't know how you could have fixed that without having a glare in the screen. For a 30 sec video, it felt a bit long. Could have thrown in some more close up reaction shots maybe? IDK. This was a nice like idea for the mini fight. The hard part of doing a 30 sec flick was thinking small enough to fit 30 sec, but big enough to fit the time exactly. Glad to see an old timers group back. You guys were a little before my time, but I remember thinking your name was funny and visiting your site. Be cool to see you guys enter a regular fight.
Well, not sure all what to say about this one. I was there when you made it, so if I were going to offer criticisms, it should have been then. I thought the pacing was really good. That was the best part. The only two things I really didn't like was that you used the name of a real product. I think it would have been much funnier if it was something made up and perhaps vampire sounding. The VO was a little too much like a radio DJ. Very bassy and you could here the little sounds "puffs" hitting the mic. I wish he would have done one boosting the mids a little and not so close to the mic. I guess the determining factor was that you didn't sell the commercial aspect of it enough. I wish I could offer more advice on how you could have done that, but I can't. I still think this was HW caliber. Especially in comparison to some of the others.
I really liked the idea of this one. If the time was tightened up to meet he time limit, I bet it would have been one of the better HWs. I read that you didn't edit it down, because you knew it was too late to be HW, but I still would have cut it down a little for the sake of the video, itself. Cutting another 30+ second or so out woudl have helped the flow, alot. Other than, that it was pretty great the way it was. One other thing I notices was your framing of the boss. There was a little too much headroom, there. It looks like what happened was you framed it up while he was sitting up straight, but then he leaned forward for most of the shots. Really fantastic job, though. If I hadn't voted (for myself hehe) already, this would have probably been my LW choice.
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