Gas Station HaikuGenre: Video Haiku
Rules: Make a haiku that takes place at a gas station! A video haiku is a 3 shot film. 1st shot is 5 sec, next is 7 sec, last 5 sec. Examples: http://bit.ly/s34Fmc
I enjoyed it, it was funny... I did think it was a little dragged out, and the ending didn't do it for me, but it's well made. The overdramatic acting was amusing. The gun was random enough to elicit a laugh.
I liked this a lot. If done differently, it might have seemed generic to me, but I just love the way it was done. The cinematography, the lack of music for the most part. It was all unsettling in a good way. And it is an intriguing premise.
I'm not sure why he was burying that picture in the beginning, and it was a pretty big coincidence that he happened on the buried map, though.
Other than that, kudos.
Hey thanks for the feedback! I appreciate it!
If you notice, he puts his dead dog into the whole in the black bag. He throws the picture in in a loving way.
This was nice. I liked it.
The skull's voice actor didn't convey enough emotion IMO, and some of the shots weren't lit well, and the transition with the skull zooming in and out didn't fit the tone. But other than that, this is a nice story with a satisfying conclusion.
Thanks for all your honesty. Glad you liked the ending. :)
Some nice camerawork, great locations.
The audio isn't up to par, and the editing isn't great either, with random transitions and cuts that distract. The acting is pretty bad too. That's what I'd work on. The sound, editing, and acting.
The rest is nice. The script works well.
This is a good one. Kind of an editing fixer upper, maybe lower the music, stuff like that, but it's really good.
thanks alot guys..had fun doin it...wish it was hw of course..and (cough) maybe im wearin the hat bc of hair issues..haha...but thanks alot.
Some very good effects in this one. Nice spin on the term 'time capsule'.
Thanks, the effects were the most time consuming part.
This isn't a lightweight. This is at least a middleweight.
Very well done with only a few flaws.
Thanks guys, the support is appreciated. When I got the approval message they said it was middleweoghts.
To be honest, my only issues in the entire thing were the backlighting in a few shots, and the very long voice over. Other than that, this is a seriously well made video and deserves better.
Very good! Cool little thriller. I'm a little dizzy now.
It was okay. Didn't love it. Kind of cliche, the pacing's slow, the story's too hard to believe. He went back in time so he could get himself killed by himself? Why take the trouble? Sure, the ending kind of makes more sense, but it doesn't make the previous 3 and a half minutes make sense. The technical aspect is good, though.
Thanks for the feedback. We really rushed this one, and didn't plan it out as well as we should have.
Very cool. One of the most entertaining so far.
Loved it. Very funny. The editing was choppy in some places, but the dinosaur effect was cheesy in a good way.
Very ridiculous. Love it.
Yeah, this is an 'edited' version. The final came out to be around 4:30 so I had to (rough) cut out a minutes worth of sillyness. Thanks for the feedback!
by Noreaster Films
by Noreaster Films
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