Gas Station HaikuGenre: Video Haiku
Rules: Make a haiku that takes place at a gas station! A video haiku is a 3 shot film. 1st shot is 5 sec, next is 7 sec, last 5 sec. Examples: http://bit.ly/s34Fmc
Hahaha, this is cute. The shot at the end made me smile. Would have loved the final shot to zoom out or be a little bit wider to really emphasis his alone-ness. Perhaps with an empty chair or something. Fun fun fun!
I was going to have an empty chair there, but felt that it would give the impression that he was crazy. When he is just a lonely man. lol but a wider shot would have been better for sure. Glad it made smile, btw loving the new touches to the site.
Cool zooming upwards shot. Hey, look, a hot girl! Haha, I like all the transitions here, very nice. You always have such beautiful shots. Seems like it moves a bit quickly though, wish it had some voice over.
Thanks Justin. Really appreciate the shot compliment, means a lot. Yeah, there was something missing from the finished thing I always thought, but I wasn't sure what. Maybe a voice over might have been the very thing. But, hey, at least we got to put something together in time for the fight!
Is there no sound to this? Ah, I see, there's a little sound at the end. Wish you had some music or something in here. You need to show the note and the picture a lot closer so the joke really "reads" - it all happens a bit quick!
Your use of three shots isn't really effective here, since it's just three cuts within the same shot. You couldn't memorize the lines beforehand? Holding the paper is quite awkward. I can hear camera handling noise which is a no-no. It's a nice little couple haikus, but with the video element of this was executed better.
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