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Rules: It's time for your main character to start over. Is he/she starting over from a bad marriage, a new job, or maybe they just lost all their lives on the video game they've been playing.
Cool use of music for the hamster's march (or roll) to the toilet. Second shot sounded like there was a little bit of an audio hiss. And the final shot looked a little washed out on my computer, but maybe that was intentional? Still definitely a cool approach to the haiku format.
This was funny and different, wasn’t probably going to win here this week but I’m guessing you’re OK with that.
Yeah, sorry, some interesting shots, but I didn’t know what exactly I was looking for.
Cool idea, but almost too many cuts going on to break up the action. And the lion as a picture and sound effect kind of ruin the buildup. Maybe do something like the lion being unseen, like “Evil Dead”, might have worked a little better here.
Kind of a bleak message, didn’t quite understand why the characters changed from one person to another. Voiceover was an interesting change of pace.
One of the better ones this week. Did you just watch the premiere of "LOST" and decide that you wanted to run the words backwards like Walt? :) Cool into as well, I'd really like to know how you did your opening titles. Also, was this something you filmed or stock footage? I'd definitely like to know more.
An interesting “ode” to Sin City, but there wasn’t a voiceover or some text so we could better understand what the character is going through, so I wasn’t sure quite what to think. Some background information would definitely help out here. Cool first shot.
Sorry, it felt like you just weren’t really trying here. Wasn't really funny.
Cool idea about the "Satan Duck", especially the stop motion animation "stopping" when the duck gets run over by the car and the heavy metal music. The problem is that your voiceover is too jarring and it takes you out of the film, with some tweaking in your editing software, it can better blend the voice into the film.
Yeah I'm sorry, I just didn't get this one at all. Didn't really follow the rules. No voiceover or text overlay. Cool TV zoom logo at the end though.
Your voiceover on the music was very good here as compared to some other examples. I didn't like the second shot of the puking, not because it grossed me out but it felt like the camera was too far away from the subject, could have been closer and more "in your face" to feel how the character is feeling after drinking tequila. Overall good job on staying on the rules for the haiku.
This one had a similar feel to mine by using text overlays for the haiku. Interesting idea, I think you just needed some work on the lighting, like in the third shot. For the second shot, the hand seems to kind of appear as a cut to the alarm clock instead of a solid move in.
Liked the song, it fit within the whole feel of what you were trying to do. You had the three shots but didn’t follow the haiku format, but hey that’s OK, I think this one was the best of the lightweights.
Cool creative song to announce your comeback. Liked the movement of the camera, definitely gave it a music video feel. But you didn't exactly stick to the rules of the haiku contest :)
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With This Ring
by The Phantom Monk
At the end of the world love needs a helping hand!6,859 views1 reviews20 votes