Your 4:3 square video is being squished into a wide screen space. Try to avoid that! Better that there are lines around the sides. Ooh, gosh that bleep sound is way too loud. I agree though, he's got to shave that off his face. Your audio sounds SUPER over compressed. Reminds me of editing digital video like 10 years ago!

I like the kid acting on the right. I see some promise there! He's keeping a straight face which is important in such scenes. I'm no good at that.

Is this supposed to take place at a bar or something? These guys should be at least drinking during the night, not the day! You could have taken the same setting and just lit it differently and it could have passed for more of a bar type place. Even if there was like bar ambience in the background and just like some very subtle light on their faces. Wow, I can totally see your finger in the shot! You should have done multiple angles or something. This was lacking a lot! Take a little more time on your shoot, think about your set and your lighting, try different angles. Watch your finger!

A darker room would have looked more like a bar and less like a dining room. Annoying boy should have a glass, not a plastic glass, and if he is to drink, then he should really drink. Kudos to glasses man...the drink order looked casual and natural. I would have finished with glasses man putting a right hook on Annoying boy and then continue to drink his drink cooly. Hindsight is always 20-20 though!