I feel like the shot of the man and the TV could be framed more evenly. He seems pushed too far ahead. Ah I see, there are more people walking up behind him. The TV fuzz is an interesting way to break it up - I want to hear even more audio stuff, like -- the glug of the clown guy drinking the water --- everything should be heightened and super crazy! I'd love to see some color in here too, I feel like his normal state would be black and white but the CRAZY state could be in color.

Audio isn't good, hard to hear the lines. Would be much more powerful if his voice sounded god-like - crisp. This is coming from his mind, we shouldn't worry about microphones and room echo.

Shot at 2:06 is pretty neat, I like the sped up effect.

Not sure that's how the splatter pattern would look on the wall - hard to get that right - need like a blood canon or something.

Wish we heard the faint buzz of the TV constantly, and then just abrupt smacks of it at random times. It's a good ambient sound.

Oh NOOO not BLOOPERS!! Augh. That totally ruins any kind of 'mood' you were setting. Always a bad idea. Just make a separate video for bloopers and outtakes - you're not making a feature here - and even then, it's like a SCARY movie, not a hilarious family comedy with a well-known actor.

Yeah, lots of stuff that seemed pretty good in here but you need to work on your audio - and please, please for the love of god, no outtakes :) - thanks for the submission guys! Hope this helps!

You made a good choice to shoot this in B&W. There is a place where the mime is talking and someone moves behind camera and creates this great shadow effect on his face. Keep that noir effect in your mind in the future.

Never trust anything a mime tells you! At least I think they're mimes...I'm not sure. I like the setting though, it's very dark and morbid with the cement walls and static on the tv.

what a great flick.the speaking role really sold me on the film's intention.

That was very creepy and had a great tone. Feel like it could have made middle weight with a little better sound and NO BLOOPERS :(. Still really good though guys