Wonderful audio quality on the shot of the kids running around, sounded great.

I like the simple title coming up on the side.

That squeaky door kind of flubbed that line for you.

Good over the shoulder shot when she\'s coming into the house.

When you do the flashes, I\'d suggest overlaying the widescreen bars so it doesn\'t bleed over into those, it\'d probably be better if the video stayed constrained to the video area.

Girl\'s a good actress.

Her \"do it\" line should have been a seperate shot probably. To add a little more emphasis.

I\'d suggest using a stock sound effect for the \'locking\' - sounded a bit tinny.

Nice, now I understand the kids shot - glad you flash back to that.

I assume this was made for something else. Good flick though, fits in with the criteria well enough.

A good looking entry, with great editing. A little slow in certain parts, especially when she's holding the gun to his head, it's supposed to be dramatic but it's drawn out too long. The flashbacks add well to tying the relationship between the brother and sister. Nice coloring effects too.

However, I have to disagree, this movie doesn't fit the theme for this week as well. I thought it was supposed to be a ripoff / spoof on gangster films? This has like nothing to do with that. Yeah so it's family and she shoots her brother, but why? Maybe she's joined a cult of some sort? A little more background info might have helped here.

Hmm, I guess her choice wasn\'t so impossible after all, eh?

Anyway, there were some continuity problems and the action REALLY dragged here. For instance, I figure he cut his finger, or burned it, or a rat bit it, or something, but NO idea what. For a second, I wondered if he faked an injury so he could stab her with an icepick. Think about what your audience sees, and expect them to \"figure it out\" as little as you can. What family? Why did they want her to kill her brother? It seemed her brother was a bumbling oaf, so what purpose could that have served?
Truth is, your entry showed some promise, but needs a little more work. It technically could fit the genre\' here, but left to my own, I wouldn\'t think it does. Two things could have really saved you here and made a decent entry fantastic.

(1) MUSIC!! It\'s more than catchy sounds, it carries the emotion of your production. Set your mood and let the music accent the changes or emphasize the action when appropriate. Do a google search for sound effects and loops, then use that with good audio quality and you will be blown away with the difference it can make.

(2) Flashbacks/Voice-Overs/video overlays, etc...
Use these sparingly, if at all, but if you use them, get the most bang for your buck with them. Why was she shooting him? A voice-over could have told this story. Did he kill her ex-lover? Video Overlay to tell this perhaps? Remember the movie (if you even know of it), Superman I and II? The flashback in that one was only 1 word, \"Forbidden\". Be that as it may, that one word told the whole story. These effects can pull you out of the action, so be VERY careful how you use them. Still, they can give you a great way to tell a story while keeping the tension high. For instance, what if while she was holding the gun to his head, you hear the voice of ther \"Godfather\" telling her why she has to kill him? Then, she decides not to kill him, then we flash outside and BANG!!

Did she kill him? I guess we don\'t ACTUALLY know, do we?

I liked this. Camera work was very nice. And the flashbacks were good and sappy. I few things that would have made this even better. MUSIC!! This desperatly needed some mood music. The lack of music was even more glaring because there was not alot of Dialuge. The interior shots needed more light. The zoom to the blood spatter on her face and the gun shot when thought everything was going to be OK was great. ALso I was confused with the whole girlfriend thing. What was the deal with all those fone calls? I didn\'t get that at all.
Overall cool film. Keep it up...more MOre MORE!!

Can't say I liked it sorry :\
It was very confusing and the story was not clear at all. What was with the black spots on her face at the end???