hi. matt. are you sad? you look so blue. OHHHHH...thats just the white balance. the white font is really hard to ready. add a shadow or outline and it should be better. damn, that wind is overbearing. watch your audio cuts. if you have a lot of background noise (or wind and maybe cars in this case) you really have to blend that shit. the guy totally fucked his line up w2hen he was talking about the taser thingy. it goes completely silent when matt is looking down at the bully...and thnen back to wind and bugs sounds.

re -watching with nicer things to say:

haha.... hes getting paid to talk about it. OUCH! kick to the groin. haha. he farts int he bag. he should have stole that video camera sitting on the road by them. aka. sexilicious :) bully and bullee. silly. good job for matt, finally getting the bully back.


main things to remember here:
set your white balance, blend your sounds, and if your actors fuck up thier lines, make them re-do it.

not a bad submission at all. story was pretty good, just some distracting technical issues. write another good story and clean up the technical side, next time and you will blow our minds.

You gotta watch those titles. Place them higher up and closer to the center. Right on the edge like that, they\'re hard to see.

Damn the wind, right? Wind is an editor\'s worst nightmare. If you camera has a built in windscreen, turn it on, it cuts out all that bass. Otherwise just redub the audio. For shots that are really far away it\'s super easy since you can\'t really see their mouths.

I don\'t understand why there\'s a line above the names.

The color is really blue and dark looking. Check out some color correction when you\'re editing to brighten things up.

Main actor has a good voice. It kind of reminds me of Jake from On Rye.

I\'d also suggest using a different font. Something thicker that will stay quality looking when compressed.

It\'s good to see a new group submit! Keep on doing it and you\'ll keep getting better, just listen to us wise old men.

This reminds me of stuff I was doing like a year ago. Funny, decent writing, but the production values are terrible. Using only one shot for a whole dialogue scene, lack of music, wind in the background, poor audio. This one was funny, and I\'ll probably vote for it, but remember what I said...REMEMBER

First entery I suppose?
My only question is, why does the whole film take place out doors? The windy sounds along with the grasshoppers defantly lowered the quality of the film. I think some cuts were a bit off, make sure you give it a moment before to stop filming, this way you can cut off the bump of when you press the recording button. I hope that made sense. I\'d say that this was a pretty descent first entry but defantly needs some work.