Great, made me smile. Well shot and good voice-over.

Your voiceover on the music was very good here as compared to some other examples. I didn\'t like the second shot of the puking, not because it grossed me out but it felt like the camera was too far away from the subject, could have been closer and more \"in your face\" to feel how the character is feeling after drinking tequila. Overall good job on staying on the rules for the haiku.

I can relate, no one likes the drunken puking and the sickness. I feel more shitty when I wake up after a night of getting krunk rather than before I go to bed. Getting up after drinking a bunch of beer is practically guarenteed chuckin\' the next day. Voice over worked well, too. Interesting choice of effect for that last shot.

This would\'ve been much more easily accomplished if you didn\'t do the cheesy \"serious\" voice. It\'s just kind of a funny effect. I didn\'t like the shots, either.

Mine. Yay.

Yeah, see, that\'s why i never drink, ever. I thought it was very creative, and a nice serious Haiku. But the narration was kind of funny, because the voice sounded like a teenager, haha which kind of ruined it for me. The ending came off strong and kind of hits you. So, I thought this was very good and pretty damn sad.

~Danielle

I like your opening shot, and the haiku monologue is a good one. In the second shot, I\'d prefer something low angle, or in line with the toilet, and it would be better if we could actually see some fake vomit. To have him die is a little melodramatic, and I don\'t know what effect that is in the final shot, but especially in something as short as a haiku video, I\'d rather not see the visual style change so dramatically. Oh, and thank you for using a voice over rather than text - much more effective! But in the future, try to record in a cleaner audio environment, use noise reduction, or at least fade the audio in and out so the background noise isn\'t so apparent.

I like this effort, but would like to see an attempt at some fake vomit in the second scene. Voice-over is clear and interesting camera angles used

Nicely done, I loved the focus in the first shot. Why the filter in the third shot?

I liked the idea of it... but, a little too dramatic for me. I\'m a hard person to impress when it comes to dramatic films though. But, I\'ve always liked Off Rye Eye, and it\'s good to see them entering.

Alcohol poisoning is serious stuff (we\'ve had at least 6 freshman out of 150 already sent to the hospital for it) and I think you are trying to convey that but it doesn\'t come across as completely serious until the last shot. The audio could be a little louder but I like the the haiku itself a lot. I would have gone with some different angles for the first 2 shots. Overall pretty good work.

I didn\'t understand the point of the weird hazy effect, and then the heavy contrast. Nothing was wrong with this one, but it didn\'t blow me away.

Second shot is so lame, you can obviously see you\'re not puking. I like th last shot.