So, a bit long for my tastes, we don\'t need to see this guy go through all the motions at the start. Let\'s get to the MEAT! Just jump cut from action to action, all the walking inbetween isn\'t needed. We don\'t need to understand every nuance of the space he\'s in. I can also see the camera shadow a bit when he walks towards the screen.

I can see you\'re trying to play towards the lonesomeness of the whole scenario. The music is great. Very lonesome! Ha, nice mustard heart! Making things out of mustard is the best. Whoa man, that\'s a dark shot. Should have boosted the brightness of the TV a bit or faked it with blue-gel\'ed lights. Or just bumped it up in color correction.

The dialogue from the TV is awesome, good work on that! Sounds good, adds a lot to that scene.

Weird shot when the other guy shows up - wicked facial hair though. I would have shot it from behind the other guy so you could see the main character\'s reaction.

Your audio quality is pretty weak, always a good idea to get very close up shots if nothing else but for just the audio you could overlay on the father shots.

Why fake the slow motion fear reaction? Why not really make it slow motion?

\"You look good\" ha - nice.

Dude, sandwiches, all about the sandwiches!

Seemed to kind of wander around without much of a point - wait, how\'d he get them dates?

Pancake rave party?! Whoa, sounds awesome. Why wasn\'t I invited?!

Anyway. I liked the characters in this, had a good start before it got too goofy, good range of actors, the TV scene was cool but not lit properly. Could have been closer to 2 or 3 minutes and held the same meaning, though I guess it really made us care about the sandwich - seeing him make it for like 2 minutes, hah.

Pull together a tighter script and some better audio and I\'ll see you next fight!

it\'s slow and hard to watch... the reveal at the end doesn\'t feel all that great and both of the side characters were rather painful

however there were some good shot choices but the framing felt a bit awkward in some of the shots. Also when you broke the axis for cheese it didn\'t feel weird at all so kudos on that one.

this video what huh program scuked
becuz zack cryed and he didnt make good sandwich
ova all i tought tat it was to wong and bowing and i diint want to finish it
becuz it was gay so i voted for da vid with the cawd own a stwing

kthxbai

May I add that at 2 pm on thursday the 5th there is more votes than views?

I didn\'t get the chance to see the other ones this one went up against, but overall, it was pretty decent. The main character\'s acting was hit and miss. The Latino guy was pretty funny but maybe a little overdone, and the roomate was perfect. I think the lighting could have been improved a bit in many of the earlier scenes. It\'d really bring it up to the same professionalism as with the angles you used. My two favorite parts were when the Latino and the roomate bit into his sandwich. I dunno how you refrained from laughing during the shoot.

Too long scenes

I saw a werewolf and a nun catch fire. lol I thought that was so funny, especially because he said so casually. Pretty good film I dare say. I liked the part of him sitting in the dark watching tv, the audio you could hear from the tv totally fit the scene. Good stuff.