Justin
Reviewed on November 1st, 2009

Hey guys! Good showing last fight, though you def could have got more votes. Promote yourselves! It's the key to winning!

Awkward camera movement in the start - would have been worth running through another time.

"Fag" - ha, this guy is edgy. I like your casting. His hair is pretty intense.

I love the added touch of another guy standing behind them in line.

You're REALLY breaking the '180 rule' here. The characters should keep looking the same direction as they speak to each other. So, the sales man should always be looking from RIGHT as he speaks to your two characters, who should always be looking LEFT back at him. It keeps it visually consistent and easier for the audience to track what's going on.

Just think of a scene having a half circle around it, that once you start filming, you can't break. I was guilty of this many a time in the past, and once you start noticing it, you start to clean up your act right fast!

Here's a wikipedia article on it which can explain it better than I could:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/180_degree_rule

Love the shot at the end in the best buy - it's great that you guys are always shooting in stores, haha.

Some technical issues marring this - overall the acting was passable, and the idea pretty funny.

I'd give this a B.

Emmerek
Reviewed on November 2nd, 2009

Laughed out loud at the "FAG" and the "s" in "stuff" written backwards. it was a good idea, solid dialogue and fast paced.

Sometimes Mike
Reviewed on November 2nd, 2009

I have watched this film. I enjoyed the concept a lot (Jusitn covered the camera and other aspects of it so I won't really get into that), but the execution could have been better. The customers lining up behind him was a funny idea, but once I saw the guy holding the computer box I instantly knew where you were going with it. Had he had the box on the ground next to him, and then he brings it into frame as he's walking up it would have been a nice 'end reveal' that would have gotten a much better chuckle from everyone watching.

A good surprising ending can save any film!

EnvelopeGenerator
Reviewed on November 3rd, 2009

OK, I totally wasn't expecting this at all! :P Some great acting, but you could definitely work on sound and camera like Justin mentioned. Still, it was pretty funny and the shot of the salesman warming up his jaw made me laugh out loud. The shot in the store at the end was a nice touch too. Funny premise, even if execution was a bit dodgy, but some bits really made me laugh and the dude's hair is rad. xD

loveislbind2all
Reviewed on November 18th, 2009

Your hair is crazy! It's like a frohawk. Hmmm maybe I'll get one. "You suck my dick, you get a computer" Wow straight out of Steve Jobs' mouth. The ending was great! Kind of reminded me of a Whitest Kids U Know sketch. Haha and the insert at the end is also a winnar!

Bonerpop
Reviewed on November 23rd, 2009

Good acting, for starters. Decent stuff in the car, technically. Might have used a white board to reflect some more light up on your faces. Outside is a little blown out (overexposed). Need better audio editing. Ha. BJs. Very funny. The "return" part was really good. Aside from the sound editing being sloppy, this was really good. Could have been a tad shorter, though. Nice work using the Best Buy employee at the end. I take it back, this would be my LW vote for the week...if we still had that. Good job.

Bryan Fox
Reviewed on November 24th, 2009

This one makes me wish I hadn't slacked off and actually did a review show for this fight. I've got a new ratings system so I don't gloss over entries that get lost in the crowd.

Sound: No complaints here. Maybe a little more ambient noise or music added in postproduction could make the scene come more alive. 4.5/5

Lighting: It was obviously a clear sunny day outside which unfortunately gave you some really harsh lighting. Some parts look too bright, and others too dark. If possible, try to schedule your outdoor scenes on a day with a slight overcast. In some cities (like where I live) that's really not possible. 2.5/5

Filmfights Criteria: That's one horny guy. Maybe come up with a shadier locale like an alleyway for the salesman to set up shop. 4.5/5

Script/Story: Funny stuff. LOVE the clip after the credits. I don't think Best Buy executives will be too happy if they saw this. I think the guy who made a return should have put his finger down his throat and induced a little gagging when he was asked for his receipt if you REALLY wanted to gross out the viewer. 4.5/5

Acting/Chreography: No complaints here. I LOVE the acting of the salesman. He was really into it. I want to see more from this guy. 5/5

Pacing/Style of Edit: Some of your shots drag on a second or two too long. I've got the same problem. The beginning drug a bit as well. 3.5/5

Overall: Funny as hell but needs a little more production value. Should have been a heavyweight. 4/5 (not an average)