movieguy
Reviewed on November 1st, 2009

I had the same idea and about same story. I´m not going to send it because my editing program has problems. But your movie is so much shorter and simpler idea than my.
This is pretty good movie. 8/10

Justin
Replied on November 1st, 2009

Ha -- too good an idea, I guess!

Justin
Reviewed on November 1st, 2009

Felt this entry was a bit longer than it needed to be. This is funny, cuz it's actually a bit like our "Writer's Block" film fight.

Dig the music during the 'couch montage' I would have put another way to show time in there ... like a clock ticking or something along those lines.

I like the angles you have when you're filming the compputer. Also, the graphics for the fake 'idea bank' site are GREAT. Unless it's a real idea bank site ... which could totally be the case.

I'd cut quicker to you on the phone - or maybe overlay the sound of you on the phone as you're looking at the screen. Would also be nice to have 'beeping' dial sounds as you dial. Seems like there's such little talking in this it's kind of odd.

Love the quick shot of the phone buzzing. Sad music coming back at the end is a nice touch as well. Ends kind of abruptly for me. No credits or anything?

A pretty good entry from you, I'm seeing some improvements.

I'd give it a C rating.

James
Replied on November 5th, 2009

Never thought about using a clock along with that shot. That would have been a good touch. And yes, I made the "Joe's Idea Bank" site, just by some simple clip art in iWeb.

And I totally agree about the talking. I couldn't really decide at the time how to do it with more talking, or how to do it with less.

Thanks for the feedback!

dethbyinc
Reviewed on November 2nd, 2009

I liked the whole waiting for time to pass, I did the same title but i like how one idea can be two seperate films. I really enjoyed the music as well, and the quality was entertaining, specially the camer to computer shot. I didnt like the text message part though just because it didnt say who was texting not that it shoul dhave but would have been a cool feature. Awesome film I enjoyed it, two thumbs up!!

James
Replied on November 5th, 2009

I enjoyed your entry as well, and it is pretty funny how 2 people with the same kind of idea can make 2 completely different films.

EnvelopeGenerator
Reviewed on November 3rd, 2009

Pretty standard idea on this one, but you did something interesting with "Joe's idea bank". It was very slow-paced and there were a few issues with sound and background noise, and the ending was a bit flat. The picture was good however, what camera are you using? I'm guessing you made this on your own, which is cool - I know how hard that can be! And you definitely get credit for actually making a film and turning your idea block into something creative. Sure beats doing nothing, right? Oh, and I would LOVE to see The Secret Life of Eyebrows slasher flick, that sounds damn awesome! :D

James
Replied on November 5th, 2009

Yes, totally did this with just myself!

I think someday I might actually make "The Secret Life of Eyebrows," just as a fun look back, and to see what I can come up with. Only time will tell, really!

loveislbind2all
Reviewed on November 18th, 2009

Fuck you and your nice ass computer! Jk! I think you could of cut out the camera's audio during the couch montage. Sorry that was poopy comment. I liked this film, but I think it could of been 30 seconds shorter. Cool screen shot by the way! (the picture that displays before playing the film)

Bonerpop
Reviewed on November 23rd, 2009

Jesus, it there a waterfall in that room? What's that loud background noise. and then it silences too abruptly when the music starts. Hold on...is that a mattress on your wall? Haha. That's weird, But I know it doesn't have anything to do with the movie, I know. OK, I got distracted and had to go back. Wait, when you are on the couch, some papers fly across the room from the other side. Ghosts or the cameraman? Weird jump cut at the desk. Good idea, but it's taking us to long to get there. Nice speaking voice and delivery! That phone thing needed to be grungier or somethign to sound like a voice coming over the phone. Ha. Nice shitty "on hold" music. Sounds like the background music for some safety training video or something. That's what that was, right? OK, good light and white balance, good acting, good idea. Even at only 2 1/2 min, I think you could have sped it up. Better sound editing would have helped, as well. From a technical aspect, the best LW. Tighten that shit up and you will have a HW video with your next submission, I bet.

Bryan Fox
Reviewed on November 24th, 2009

I've got a new ratings system so I don't gloss over entries that get lost in the crowd.

Sound: That was a nasty cut starting the background noise in the beginning. Either fade it in or start it at the beginning of the clip. The background noise is also a bit loud and is really annoying in parts withotu music. I recognized the music from Freeplay. Gives your movie a much more original feeling than using "the current hit song from the radio". 3/5

Lighting: Hit and miss. The scenes where he's near a window has that "harsh" look where you have a lot of shadows in one part and brightness in other parts. The part at 00:47 where he's using the computer looks great, but could use a soft light behind him to cut him out from the background. Check out some 3 point lighting tutorials on the net. 2.5/5

Filmfights Idea: Money not buying ideas is a true thing...5/5

Script/Story: ...but only a fool would spend their money on something like that. An idea is worthless unless you work to make it come to fruition. It's just my taste, but I would have preferred you take it from that angle. 3/5

Acting/Choreography: The acting was fine. You got off easy in that most of your acting is not spoken which isn't a bad thing. 4.5/5

Pacing/Style: This movie flowed pretty nicely and needed to be edited to that of a slow burn. Part of your title is cut off on the side at the beginning. It might have flowed a little better if you showed the transaction briefly online and the idea was emailed instead. You also would have killed any spoken lines which might not have been a bad thing. 3.5/5

Overall: Too rough around the edges for me to vouch for heavyweight status, but with a little more work, this could easily have been one. Kudos for making this solo. It's tough to come up with good idea if you're working on a film by yourself. 3/5 (not an average)