So, obviously you know why you're in the LWs! Way too long, haha. I like your hats, I like the location. I like the accents.

I still haven't seen "Castaway."

You've got a bit of an error cutting "I don't need" is repeated twice, and the response. Your character should also already be walking away from the camera instead of at a dead stop when we cut to him.

Last line is pretty great.

what about 30 seconds did we not understand?

Like Justin said, you can hear that one line repeated ("I don't need this"), and the visual edit starts too early, because we can see him start his walking again. If you tightened that up for continuity, there's no reason you'd have to use both audio tracks, so pick either one. Especially since his head is off-camera during that line, you can manipulate the audio however you want and the audience wouldn't know.

Obviously it should be shorter, but not just because of the time limit. I think more organization and script preparation in the pre-planning and a tighter pace could make this more engaging.

I really liked the first half of this. Shots were set up nicely and the acting was good. Gets a little iffy after the line"WILSON!". Doesn't seem like the shots flow as good from that point. At one time you say "I don't need this" and the "I don't" can be heard in two different shots. Decent idea for a 30 fights, though. I like you guys' dedication. Seems like you enter about every week. Hope to see you up in the HWs with Emmerek, next time. (I think you have made HW, before)