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eems like you guys had a good time making this - your fighting style is very awkward, ha. I like the close ups - the actual fighting is very unconvincing. The stab at the end is a good effect, but the dude is totally smiling! Come on, he just got murdered! He should be freaking out. That blood is very watery that's coming out of him - was he full of delicious capri sun?
To shoot something like this smoothy, you need to be aware of the 180 rule. For instance, at 00:19 - if he's punching the cop from the right of the screen to the left, we should keep that orientation when we cut to a wide, but you flip it so he's finishing his punch going from left to right. Makes things more confusing to follow. Keep that consistent! The stab through the arm should have been done in a farther away shot, or a much tighter shot - very easy to spot it's fake (unless that was your intention?)
Like I said, I dig the closeups a lot, just needed your actors to be more convincing. Some good DIY special effects in this
I give this film a D+ -- sorry if I seem harsh, just trying to keep it real! You can always let me know if you think I'm being a wackadoo ;)
D+ We passed!!!
Thank you for all of the input. we appreciate it.
I don't know why the close up on the spoon made me laugh from excitement the first time I saw this. Probably has to do with the fast tempo which suddenly turns into a slow tranquil heart beat. A kitchen seems like a death trap after this film by the way.
that was okay, editing was okay, blood looked like red juice diluted with water, the stab scenes looked alraight, i think your biggest flaw here is th dull acting. and some of the scenes werent cut right. LoL at the bubble in the blood on the spoon
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